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12/05/05
Very deep, as I read my spirit went down, glad you picked it up so that hope really does 'spring' eternal.
12/05/05
Wow is right! Grabbed me, held me, carried me to the end! Wow! Just loved this!
What a unique and gripping style in this poem! It pulled me right along and never let me go as it flowed with the course of the addiction and healing. Truly a terrific poem about a difficult subject!
12/07/05
Perfect, the best I've read today.
This poem works well, except that the "Aloneless" stanza is awkwardly written.
So simple, yet so very descriptive of the battle. great job.
I loved the use of the cycles of the season in parallel with the cycle of addiction; the pared down language made the description of addiction extremely compelling, and the breaking of the cycle realistic. Excellent work. God bless.
Very effective. The punch line (single word) at the end of each stanza is a powerful way to emphasize the journey! Loved the "turning point":

Refreshing breeze,
the Spiritís wind
enlightens soul.
Conviction.
A very cool take on the topic! Well done!
12/11/05
This is very cleverly done! Incorporating the seasons, the strong message, the four-syllable rhythm in every line bar the last of each stanza, the hope you leave with the reader - WELL DONE!