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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Spring (as in the season) (11/28/05)

TITLE: Addiction's Call
By Laurie Glass
11/28/05


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Warm breezes blow,
sun shines so bright,
such promises.
Enticement.

Addictionís call
less subtle now,
the echo strong.
Temptation.

To try just once,
it cannot hurt,
with fire play.
Agreement.

Too hot to touch,
yet canít let go,
the fear begins.
Confusion.

A chilly breeze,
attempt to reach
for something warm.
Discomfort.

Does not provide
its promised fix,
but takes control.
Deception.

Attempt to stop,
keep falling down
and blow away.
Frustration.

Just settle in,
no reason now
to even try.
Dejection.

Cold breezes blow,
the frigid heart
is held in place.
Rebellion.

Apparently
thereís no way out,
cold prison cell.
Confinement.

Such guilt and shame
Feeds cycle now,
draw into self.
Aloneness.

With head hung low
in deep regret,
a bitter heart.
Resentment.

Refreshing breeze,
the Spiritís wind
enlightens soul.
Conviction.

Agrees with Him,
remorseful now,
on bended knee.
Confession.

Hope enters in
and like the Spring,
new life begins.
Assurance.

Addictionís call
like melted snow
has gone away.
Elation.


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c clemons12/05/05
Very deep, as I read my spirit went down, glad you picked it up so that hope really does 'spring' eternal.
Pat Guy 12/05/05
Wow is right! Grabbed me, held me, carried me to the end! Wow! Just loved this!
Linda Watson Owen12/06/05
What a unique and gripping style in this poem! It pulled me right along and never let me go as it flowed with the course of the addiction and healing. Truly a terrific poem about a difficult subject!
Jan Ackerson 12/07/05
Perfect, the best I've read today.
Diane L. Harris12/08/05
This poem works well, except that the "Aloneless" stanza is awkwardly written.
Naomi Deutekom12/08/05
So simple, yet so very descriptive of the battle. great job.
Alexandra Wilkin12/09/05
I loved the use of the cycles of the season in parallel with the cycle of addiction; the pared down language made the description of addiction extremely compelling, and the breaking of the cycle realistic. Excellent work. God bless.
Beth Muehlhausen12/10/05
Very effective. The punch line (single word) at the end of each stanza is a powerful way to emphasize the journey! Loved the "turning point":

Refreshing breeze,
the Spiritís wind
enlightens soul.
Conviction.
Brandi Roberts12/10/05
A very cool take on the topic! Well done!
Suzanne R12/11/05
This is very cleverly done! Incorporating the seasons, the strong message, the four-syllable rhythm in every line bar the last of each stanza, the hope you leave with the reader - WELL DONE!