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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Vines (11/21/05)

TITLE: A Vine Covered Mansion
By Marilyn Schnepp
11/23/05


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Vine Covered Mansion"

On the south side of town,
In a vine covered shack
Lived an old man named Dixon
Whom they called Uncle Jack..

"No money for paint",
The old man once said,
.So he covered his castle
With green vines instead!

The roof was patched
And his floors were bare,
But he thought himself rich
Cause he owned a good chair!

He'd sit in that rocker
In his room each night
And read his Bible
By the candlelight..

One night he was reading
About mansions Up There,
When he started to nod...
Falling asleep in his chair.

* * * *
Suddenly he was standing
On a street paved with gold
In front of a mansion
That was a delight to behold!

The windows were Diamonds
And trimmed in white Pearls;
And a roof made of Stardust
With Rainbow- type swirls!

And the sign on the door!
...Wow! What a surprise!
He thought it said "Dixon"
So he blinked his eyes!
* * * * *
Opening his eyes
He was now fully aware..
So he bowed his head
And said this prayer:

"Thank you, Dear Lord,
For that Mansion so fine!.
But a Vine Covered Mansion
Would be simply Devine!"

John 14:2 (KJV) "In my fathers house are many mansions...."


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Sandra Petersen 11/28/05
This was delightful, though the rhythm is off a few times. Great final line about wishing the mansion in Heaven was ivy-covered. Good job!
Jan Ackerson 11/28/05
There are a few issues with punctuation and spelling, and I don't think the rows of asterisks are needed. But this is a very charming poem, and I absolutely loved that he wanted to decorate his mansion!
Mary Lang11/29/05
Great poem, good rhythm. Thanks for the smile. God Bless.
Anita Neuman11/29/05
Cute poem. You described both settings so well, and with so few words - amazing!
Garnet Miller 12/01/05
Great poem. A mansion awaits us all one day!
Phyllis Inniss 12/01/05
Enjoyed your poem and the rhythm and the contentment of Dixon.
Helga Doermer12/05/05
Though the poem reads nice and easy, with a gentle rhyhm, the contents hold a wonderful vision.

Congratulations on your second place win.
Marilyn Schnepp 12/10/05
I want to thank all of you who took the time to comment, to review and critique my little poem about "Dixon" and his Vine Covered Shack - I appreciate words from my peers; and also the Congratulations! You could have knocked me over with a feather...I was so surprised!

Thanks to all those who stopped by just to read...that's what we Writers do...write for the Readers..and hope they enjoy.
Linda Watson Owen01/12/06
Marilyn, how did I miss reading this absolute jewel of yours??? Where in the world was I?? Haha! I dearly love this poem and can see it illustrated as a children's book even. Precious!
Paul Potenza09/27/06
Your last line hit me like a ton of bricks.

It literally made me bow my head and thank God for what I currently have and for what I've been promised.

Thank you Marilynn.

You MOVED me.

Pauly