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Topic: Winter (11/14/05)
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TITLE: Winter's Chill | Previous Challenge Entry
By c clemons
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At this time I
Have a winter season
In my life
Seems to be that
Everything has come
To a complete halt
In my life
The winds are blowing
Still blowing now
As I write
In my life
I kind of expected
A season of lack
When I had done all
In my life
Not now when
I am in the prime
Time of things
In my life
I look about
Nothing is growing
Seems to be dead
In my life
Every leaf appears
To have fallen
Not even a bud
In my life
Bad news
Bad reports abound
Almost everyday
In my life
Yet as sad
As I feel
As barren as it looks
In my life
I speak to my soul
Be not disquieted
God is still the anchor
In my life
He loves me still
Even with winter’s
Trials and disappointments
In my life
I must remember
After every “winter season”
Will come the spring
In my life
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I would use the refrain "in my life" more sparingly; the poem will still hang together (this was advice once given to me from my husband about one of my poems after I began to read it aloud to him!)
Was the absence of punctuation intentional? My own thought is that the use of periods and commas to complete a thought might actually encapsulate them so that they could be pondered one by one. Overall the thoughts were well-expressed.