The Official Writing Challenge
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11/21/05
beautifully wrote, I would like to see what happens to Brenda.
11/23/05
Some issues in technique here. Note italics signify thoughts. I liked the way you handled the opening scene in dialog, although there was a continity problem. A little work and this one will deserve attention.
11/26/05
Yikes! A cliff hanger. Good story, although I agree with dub's post. Very helpful. I was interested to the edge.
God bless ya, littlelight