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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Digital Detox (04/24/14)

TITLE: Comfort Bytes
By Chris Goglin
04/30/14


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In our world of yummy delights,
How do we know if all is right?
A new techy toy can so lure us in,
We must be cautious before we begin.
So many to choose from...IPad, IPhone, IWant!
A brand new upgrade to guardedly flaunt.

Email and texting distracts our clear minds,
We all need a vacation to help us unwind.
Our cell phone stuck to the palm of our hands,
Waiting for another cyber command.
We can map it and follow the quick computation,
Arriving at just the right destination.

Video games give a sense of reward,
Is there nothing else when one is bored?
We live in a life of fantasy fiction,
How can we conquer this appealing addiction?
Win or lose, it is only a game,
Who cares if it clouds our exceptional brain!

We wake every morning conceding to Facebook,
Two hours go by, and we’re already hooked.
The Lord is still waiting to help start our day,
But unending posts grant us free play.
Photos to share, a profile to change;
My legs just went numb…how very strange!

Isn’t it time to give it a rest?
God is still waiting, but does not protest.
To over-indulge in tempting delights,
That captures your days and shortens your nights.
Discern this entrapment whenever you can;
Hold on to God’s wisdom along with His plan.


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/01/14
This is a delightful poem. You have a wonderful sense of humor. It is amazing how techno our world has become. I liked your message and your fun way of presenting it. My tablet broke last week and I've really missed it, but it has allowed me to do other things for sure. You did a nice job of writing on topic.
Joe Moreland05/02/14
I'm not very qualified to judge poetry, but I really enjoyed this piece. It was easy to read and the rhythm and pace of it seemed spot on to me. And, of course, it nailed the topic right on the head.

I think this was a great piece of writing and I hope to see it does well this week.
CD Swanson 05/03/14
Excellent job, well done and well said. So many new gadgets, and so many people clamoring to get in line to be the "first" to purchase them. It really is mind boggling, and in a sense their "idols" to many due to their fascination and obsession with them.

Great work!

God bless~
Joanne Sher 05/05/14
You've got some great images and analogies here, and a few lines I won't soon forget.

There were a few places where I stumbled with the meter - but they are likely easy fixes. Didn't take away from my enjoyment.

Thanks for sharing - a great reminder!
Larry Whittington05/06/14
I liked the very steady rhythm in each line. For me, this makes it easier to read.

Your thoughts were clearly expressed and your main point brought out.

If we become inbondaged to anything, it becomes an idol that we are enslaved to.

Very good writing.
Maura J. Merrigan05/07/14
A great, on topic, creative write here , I enjoy writing and reading poetry and this was excellent to read!