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This is a delightful poem. You have a wonderful sense of humor. It is amazing how techno our world has become. I liked your message and your fun way of presenting it. My tablet broke last week and I've really missed it, but it has allowed me to do other things for sure. You did a nice job of writing on topic.
05/02/14
I'm not very qualified to judge poetry, but I really enjoyed this piece. It was easy to read and the rhythm and pace of it seemed spot on to me. And, of course, it nailed the topic right on the head.

I think this was a great piece of writing and I hope to see it does well this week.
05/03/14
Excellent job, well done and well said. So many new gadgets, and so many people clamoring to get in line to be the "first" to purchase them. It really is mind boggling, and in a sense their "idols" to many due to their fascination and obsession with them.

Great work!

God bless~
05/05/14
You've got some great images and analogies here, and a few lines I won't soon forget.

There were a few places where I stumbled with the meter - but they are likely easy fixes. Didn't take away from my enjoyment.

Thanks for sharing - a great reminder!
I liked the very steady rhythm in each line. For me, this makes it easier to read.

Your thoughts were clearly expressed and your main point brought out.

If we become inbondaged to anything, it becomes an idol that we are enslaved to.

Very good writing.
05/07/14
A great, on topic, creative write here , I enjoy writing and reading poetry and this was excellent to read!