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04/24/14
I really enjoyed this story that not only described the MC's frustration, but coincided with describing it as well.

Many truths shared here, very good points about being on time for such "inane" functions, and neandering about for the most important thing we should be doing, "giving worship and honor" to the Lord, our Father.

Although it was frustrating for the MC, I did smile at the references and descriptions along the way. This is a sign of an excellent writer, because I was amused and yet a powerful message came forward at once.

Well done.

God bless~
04/24/14
Correction: Sorry the first line was supposed to read as follows:

I really enjoyed this story that not only described the MC's frustration, but coincided with showing it as well.



Loved it!
God bless~
You have a delightful sense of humor. I think some men might disagree with you about women being on time. In my experience it's more dependent on the personality not the sex. Often the mom has to get everyone ready while dad sits in the car just having himself to worry about. Just that difference made me smile and think how much we can be alike and different at the same time. God created us for a unique purpose and it seems to work out wonderfully when we give him control. I bet you didn't think that's what the average person would take from your story but it shows how the Spirit is using your words in ways you might not have imagined. Nice job.
04/26/14
I am definitely going to disagree with you about whether men or women are most often late. Having three daughters and a wife, I have experienced first hand just how long it takes a woman to get ready and have spend many a toe-tapping, watch-checking morning while I wait for make-up to be applied, earrings to be found and hair to be blow-dried, curled and styled.

Of course, that's my experience - someone else's may be, and probably is, different.

As for your story, I thought you did a wonderful job of showing us the MC's frustration with humor and authenticity (although I assume you got the roles reversed). :)
04/26/14
I am definitely going to disagree with you about whether men or women are most often late. Having three daughters and a wife, I have experienced first hand just how long it takes a woman to get ready and have spend many a toe-tapping, watch-checking morning while I wait for make-up to be applied, earrings to be found and hair to be blow-dried, curled and styled.

Of course, that's my experience - someone else's may be, and probably is, different.

As for your story, I thought you did a wonderful job of showing us the MC's frustration with humor and authenticity (although I assume you got the roles reversed). :)
04/26/14
Nice job using descriptions and great word choices to convey a sense of humor while still imparting a lot of truth to the piece. Keep up the good work!
Been there! I hate being late to anything, but my husband makes it a sport. Enjoyed your story! Blessings.
04/29/14
I enjoyed this. I was right there with the Main Character... getting edgier with each delay!
04/29/14
Fun, clever story! Most women seem to take forever getting ready, but Taking a big risk here not having any idea what age group the characters were, in my experience with age, over 65, the women tend to organize and tidy up much faster and the men get much slower at things... Just a guess from many people I know! Great story!
I liked the conversation style of activities to show what you mean.

This is, I am sure, for entertainment rather than educational. Just show this piece to your husband and see if learns anything from it.

I enjoyed it and learned one more thing that bugs you: being late for church.
05/01/14
Congrats for a lively piece that had everyone expressing their opinions! Excellent work.

God bless~