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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: First World Problem (04/17/14)

TITLE: Get Me to the Church On Time!
By Chris Goglin
04/22/14


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Everyone has their own preferences for arriving promptly to various destinations. Is it strange that people can be punctual to doctor’s appointments, mealtimes, or sport’s events, but getting to church at an appropriate time becomes flexible and insignificant?

I believe women tend to prepare commendably, even though they have more to do. They plan for the allotted time to style their hair, put on makeup, get dressed, and have a bite to eat…with ample time to arrive just a touch early to mingle with others. On the other hand, some men like to relax, take a shower at the last minute and even watch TV or go back to bed for a quick nap.

My husband is a perfect example. I will be all ready to go holding my Bible and standing by the door, as he shouts from the bedroom, “I will be right there, honey.”

Then patiently waiting in the car, I check my watch. After five minutes or so, I get out of the car and go back into the house.

“Are you ready yet?”

As my husband slowly ties his shoe, “Yep, I’m coming.”

He settles in the driver’s seat and suddenly remembers he forgot his Bible.

“I’ll be right back,” as he disappears through the front door. Still feeling confident, I look at my watch again and wait another five minutes.

As he checks out the rose bushes along the sidewalk, he finally finds the car, and slowly opens the back car door to position his Bible carefully on the seat. Sliding into the driver’s seat as though he recently broke his leg, he smiles and looks at me intently.

“Do you have the keys?”

Frantically searching through my purse, “No, I thought you did!”

“I know where they are, I left them in my pair of pants when I went to the store.”

Consequently, another run to the house puts us back a few more minutes.

“Finally, let’s go,” I insisted, as we backed down the driveway. I am sure I hear my wonderful husband thinking..."Right on!" under his breath.

Expecting another well-planned delay, I react quickly, “Wait, aren't we turning the wrong way?”

“Oh, I forgot to get the mail on Saturday, only takes a minute to get it.”

In desperation, I calculate the distance to the mailbox and take a deep breath. Nearly ten minutes late now, I glance at the speedometer... “Isn't the speed limit here 35? We are only going 25.”

“Oh yeah"….he winked, "we have plenty of time.”

As we take the long way to church, we finally pull into the parking lot with a few minutes to spare.

“See, we made it…how come you look a little flushed honey, are you coming down with something?”

I roll my eyes, as I hurry to the front entrance. I am beginning to realize, my husband’s “on time” and my “on time” is not the SAME time!


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CD (Camille) Swanson 04/24/14
I really enjoyed this story that not only described the MC's frustration, but coincided with describing it as well.

Many truths shared here, very good points about being on time for such "inane" functions, and neandering about for the most important thing we should be doing, "giving worship and honor" to the Lord, our Father.

Although it was frustrating for the MC, I did smile at the references and descriptions along the way. This is a sign of an excellent writer, because I was amused and yet a powerful message came forward at once.

Well done.

God bless~
CD (Camille) Swanson 04/24/14
Correction: Sorry the first line was supposed to read as follows:

I really enjoyed this story that not only described the MC's frustration, but coincided with showing it as well.



Loved it!
God bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/24/14
You have a delightful sense of humor. I think some men might disagree with you about women being on time. In my experience it's more dependent on the personality not the sex. Often the mom has to get everyone ready while dad sits in the car just having himself to worry about. Just that difference made me smile and think how much we can be alike and different at the same time. God created us for a unique purpose and it seems to work out wonderfully when we give him control. I bet you didn't think that's what the average person would take from your story but it shows how the Spirit is using your words in ways you might not have imagined. Nice job.
Joe Moreland04/26/14
I am definitely going to disagree with you about whether men or women are most often late. Having three daughters and a wife, I have experienced first hand just how long it takes a woman to get ready and have spend many a toe-tapping, watch-checking morning while I wait for make-up to be applied, earrings to be found and hair to be blow-dried, curled and styled.

Of course, that's my experience - someone else's may be, and probably is, different.

As for your story, I thought you did a wonderful job of showing us the MC's frustration with humor and authenticity (although I assume you got the roles reversed). :)
Joe Moreland04/26/14
I am definitely going to disagree with you about whether men or women are most often late. Having three daughters and a wife, I have experienced first hand just how long it takes a woman to get ready and have spend many a toe-tapping, watch-checking morning while I wait for make-up to be applied, earrings to be found and hair to be blow-dried, curled and styled.

Of course, that's my experience - someone else's may be, and probably is, different.

As for your story, I thought you did a wonderful job of showing us the MC's frustration with humor and authenticity (although I assume you got the roles reversed). :)
Glynis Becker 04/26/14
Nice job using descriptions and great word choices to convey a sense of humor while still imparting a lot of truth to the piece. Keep up the good work!
Cheryl Harrison 04/28/14
Been there! I hate being late to anything, but my husband makes it a sport. Enjoyed your story! Blessings.
Linda Buskirk04/29/14
I enjoyed this. I was right there with the Main Character... getting edgier with each delay!
Maura J. Merrigan04/29/14
Fun, clever story! Most women seem to take forever getting ready, but Taking a big risk here not having any idea what age group the characters were, in my experience with age, over 65, the women tend to organize and tidy up much faster and the men get much slower at things... Just a guess from many people I know! Great story!
Larry Whittington04/30/14
I liked the conversation style of activities to show what you mean.

This is, I am sure, for entertainment rather than educational. Just show this piece to your husband and see if learns anything from it.

I enjoyed it and learned one more thing that bugs you: being late for church.
CD (Camille) Swanson 05/01/14
Congrats for a lively piece that had everyone expressing their opinions! Excellent work.

God bless~