The Official Writing Challenge
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02/14/14
Good story with a good message...thank you.

God bless~
A wonderful heartfelt story. Thanks
This is a powerful story. I liked seeing the gruff character from the eyes of the little boy. It reminded me that things aren't always what we think.

I really liked your dialog. You might have used it even more to show the reader the back story. For example: "Why don't the neighbors talk to you?"

Dialog us not easy to master, but you do a fine job of making it feel natural. You nailed the topic and wrote a story that really connected with me. I also like your message. I look forward to reading more of your work.