The Official Writing Challenge
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02/06/14
Powerful story about the relationship between the two MC's...and you've done a fabulous job describing it. I just loved the ending, all resolved and peace restored.

Great job.

God bless~
Well put together story.

Sometimes the worst has to happen before the best can begin.

I don't know much about the Dr. stuff so took what was said at face value.

Keep writing about what you know about.
02/11/14
I believe you're missing some quote marks in this passage:

“Look, yelled one of the kids. They are heading right for each other, They are going to crash! Someone is going to get hurt. Tell them to stop, before it’s too late! Besides, the ice is thin there.

Aside from that it was a very good story. I liked the change from bookends to book buddies.
02/13/14
Congratulations!

God bless~