The Official Writing Challenge
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01/25/14
This read like an informative report and was on topic. Quite interesting entry.

God bless~
01/27/14
That would be a tremendous challenge to balance things out. I hope you can do that. Thanks for sharing your story.
You have a unique and interesting voice. I liked where you were going, but I needed more. I wanted to see the struggles of a family and really understand and feel for the people. You did cover the topic and that first line hooked me. Keep writing and read and comment on as many challenges as possible. Also in the message boards there is a great thread for all levels of writers called Jan's Writing Basics. I've learned so much from Jan and she is great at responding to everyone who posts on her thread.