The Official Writing Challenge
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Great story with a great ending! I loved it. Nicely done, and nicely told.

God bless~
Great job!
I like the way you handled the topic. It was interesting, suspenseful and fresh.

The only red ink I have is don't start a sentence with a numeral, either write it out(though that isn't always easy or correct with time) or use a word like At 8:00...

Overall, though, you did a splendid job. Your characters were real and the conflict interesting.
Congrats! God bless~