The Official Writing Challenge
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10/31/13
This is a stirring piece that speaks to the challenges of life in this world and the battles many face on a daily basis. So glad it ended on a happy note with your MC being saved and renewed.

For ease of reading, break your writing into two or more paragraphs.
11/04/13
Powerful with an uplifting ending. Thanks for sharing.

God bless~
This reads like poetry. You have some wonderful metaphors in this piece. You used quite a few water words. Next time, try not to take the topic quite so literally. Push yourself to think outside the box. You do have a wonderful style of writing. Your passion shines through. I have no doubt that many will be touched by your words and able to relate.
11/07/13
Congratulations! God Bless~