The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 238 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
You do a really nice job of building your characters and creating a sense of suspense. The only thing I would caution is don't give away the ending with your title. Instead you may have wanted something like The Gold Envelopes or something that would pique the reader's curiosity. You did a nice job though and I liked the lesson in the story. Things aren't what they seem and people seem to get more judgmental each year. :) It's a great reminder for us all.
10/21/13
Nicely told and written. I really enjoyed this whole piece. Thank you.
God bless~
Congratulations my friend! I'm doing my patented Happy Dance just for you! You can't stop entering now!! Keep writing.
10/24/13
Congratulations! God bless~
10/27/13
This is quite an engaging story. I can see something like this happening. Your ending warmed my heart. :)