The Official Writing Challenge
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I enjoyed this. Your descriptions were lovely and I think you did a nice job with it. I'm not sure if the present tense worked for me. That could just be my opinion but I sensed immediately it was a dream. I think you did a nice job of handling the literary device of using a dream though. It's not easy to do and you did it quite masterfully.
What a beautiful story. Thank you for teaching me a delightful word: juggers. I was totally immersed, and surprisingly caught unawares this was a dream. Great job!
08/20/13
This was a sheer joy to read, and you took me by surprise at the ending. I had no idea it was a dream.

Great job!

God Bless~
08/22/13
Congrats! God bless~