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I enjoyed this piece. Your ending really packs a powerful punch. I'm not sure if you needed the first part. The transition was a bit rough. Instead you might have shown the couple's relationship a bit more, and then added the metaphor about the whine of the refrigerator. I could even see the minister working it into a sermon. Your message is a great one. I'm sure many people can relate or know someone like your MC. Again the ending was fabulous. Many struggle with a good ending with the word limit but you make it look easy. This is a thought provoking piece. I enjoyed it, especially the second half. Good job. Keep writing those stories God places on your heart. Your words will touch people more that you could ever imagine.
05/31/13
Powerful conclusion in this entertaining entry.

God bless~
06/03/13
I am so NOT an expert, and I always to hesitate to offer suggestions, but it seems to me that the first three paragraphs might be a little too much explanation. It is the only weak section I find in this piece, and the overall point is wonderful. It is well written and I enjoyed it.