The Official Writing Challenge
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05/25/13
wow-powerfully said and written. Great exit line!

God bless~
05/28/13
Gripping
05/28/13
Quite a twist there. I had to read it twice to catch your twist at the end. Nicely done.

There were lots of little details woven in here and it was so sad to see the way it turned out. I was wondering what would happen and the last line is really a good one. Thanks for sharing!
Great premise. Loved how the intro worked and what you did with the subject using the old "ding dong Avon calling." More than funny, it had a compelling twist with one of the best closing lines I've ever read. Stan
06/02/13
Well written and genuinely funny and you wrapped it up so well!