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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Rattled (05/09/13)

TITLE: Chatterbox
By Lisa Hudson
05/09/13


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Chatterbox

My nerves, my patience, my ability to think clearly…completely rattled. What a word. But it fits so well, at least today. I am certain I am feeling more vulnerable than usual to the irritating things that I can normally overlook. The chatterbox sitting next to me in the office, for example. I am purposely staying focused on my computer monitor so she can see that I am busy, yet she insists on talking, no…chirping at me. I want to just say “HUSH!” but I want to be nice…but it is getting harder and harder. Yes, rattled is the perfect word for how I feel at the moment!

I have learned that not all people are aware of the ‘signals’ we try to send to one another. We try to be polite but also try to convey that we aren’t available to chit-chat right now, and some people just don’t get it. I believe a correct term for this is to have, or to lack the ability to pick up on ‘social cues’. This describes ‘chatterbox’ well. What am I saying? It describes my kids! They are nearly grown now, but when I think about the many times I have stood with my mouth wide open from disbelief that they ‘didn’t get it’ just…well…rattles me!

Growing up, my dad had ‘a face’ that meant whatever was going on was to stop immediately! I remember a family dinner once, it could have even been on Thanksgiving. The four of us kids were laughing and cutting up, and I guess we went a little overboard, because one by one, the chatter at the table grew more quiet. I’m pretty sure I was the last to catch on because I can remember laughing out loud, then realizing I was the only one who was laughing! I scanned the family starting from mom on my right, and then slowly I looked across the table at my brothers. Instinctively, I turned to my immediate left at my sister who didn’t dare look back at me. Nope, they were all looking at the man at the head of the table. His eyes were burning into mine, with his lips pierced and nostrils flared. That was the look! We all knew it was time to be quiet. Dad had really good ‘social cues’!

My kids, on the other hand…not so much. I remember the first time I tried to use daddy’s look on them. I might as well have been invisible! I learned very quickly that I had to put words to my look, or nothing would happen. Once I had been the organizer of an award ceremony at church, so of course I had the honor of standing on stage to announce the recipients. I can’t imagine what was so important that my kids needed to ask me their questions right then, but while I’m trying to read names, all three of my children got up from their seats, walked up to the foot of the stage and all said, “Momma”! I’m sure I tried to play it cool, and probably said something motherly like, “Kids, mommy is busy right now…go back to your seats.” They stayed put. I imagine I turned all shades of red when again, I heard, “Momma!” The really scary part of this story is that my husband, their daddy, was sitting in the audience! Obviously he was having trouble picking up my ‘social cues’ to him when I had to speak to him in the microphone to come up and get his kids!

I don’t know…maybe it’s me. I just know that when I’m speaking to someone and they start yawning or checking their phone for messages, my conversation probably needs to come to an end. I always knew when I embarrassed my mother when I said something I shouldn’t have. She had a look too, but she also had a way of thwacking our cheeks. It had a way of sending chutes of pain through your cheeks up to your eyes which would start to water upon impact. I got the message loud and clear. Mom learned later that she may have caused permanent nerve damage if she had hit the right nerve! Well, I may have ended up with a droopy face but I sure would know when to shut up!

That last thought kind of cracked me up. I’m still hearing the constant chirping from ‘chatterbox’, but I’m not as rattled as I was before.


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Grace Merkey 05/18/13
We all know people like that. My dad had a "look" also. You did a good job.
Genia Gilbert05/21/13
Chatterboxes never seem to pick up on "social cues." Guess they're too busy talking. :) Good job of showing the frustrations and learning patience too.
Francie Snell 05/22/13
This is SO hilarious. You sent giggles to every part of me. You were so gentle and kind with your children. I know I never could have handled the embarrassing moment before all eyes and ears as gracefully as you did. What colorful moments the Lord gave you to write about. I love all of your descriptions. This piece is truly a winner to me. God Bless you in your writing. Obviously, He already has.

Francie
Judith Gayle Smith05/22/13
I was dubbed "motormouth". Hoo boy can I relate! My Dad would stare at my eyebrows and rant . . .
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/22/13
I truly enjoyed the story. You had me smiling from beginning to end and nodding my head in agreement.

A tiny bit of red ink would be to not use the topic word as much. You did an excellent job of showing me you were rattled by your terrific descriptions. Another thing you may want to consider is save the exclamation points for dialog. Instead let Your words do the exclaiming for you.

You had a fantastic beginning. It drew me in immediately. I felt like I was listening to a dear friend. You also have a delightful sense of humor. I did so want to know what the kids thought was so important to tell you as your husband sat by. :) I loved that part because it feels so...typical! I think you did a great job with this piece.
CD Swanson 05/22/13
Many people will be able to relate to this clever and fun story! Nicely done. I really loved this.

God bless~