The Official Writing Challenge
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Delightful. Surprising. I love it. Spacing and paragraphing would help to read it more clearly. This is a joy to read.
I really enjoyed your take on this. It's a delightful devotion, starting with something everyone can understand or relate to. For me personally, I felt you overused the topic word. There have been many past winners who never even use the topic word. You were spot on topic and didn't need to add all of those extra splashes and definitions in parentheses. Trust yourself. You did a great job of telling your message while keeping it exciting and moving. I think you did a great job with the ending too. I like your line too, I could see it being used on T shirts and stuff because it is powerful and a great draw. Nice job.
04/13/13



Great Tag-line. I enjoyed this whole piece.


Good job.

God bless~
04/18/13
What a great take on the subject. And well written. I agree that your use of the topic made the point without the topic word having to be used too much. However it made a great read.