The Official Writing Challenge
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Take note:

KJV 1 Corinthians 13:11 "When I was a child, I spake as a child, I understood as a child, I thought as a child: but when I became a man, I put away childish things."

KJV Colossians 3:19 "Husbands, love your wives, and be not bitter against them."

Note - having childhood desires when a full grown child of God, it is best that those desires be for the things of God.
I think you've given voice to many of our internal ideas/conversations/justifications etc.
The rambling dialogue suits the story though for some may prove burdensome (not me....lol)
I loved all your descriptions: both physical and emotional. I loved your Valentine Gift ending. And the Bible Quote to go with it. Keep Writing.
God Bless.
I loved all your descriptions: both physical and emotional. I loved your Valentine Gift ending. And the Bible Quote to go with it. Keep Writing.
God Bless.
02/18/13
Ahhh...the inevitable sacrifices and adaptations of "wifery", but oh, the satisfaction of it, like here, with the putting aside of "self" and its wants. All captured beautifully along with a banquet for the senses. Thank you.
02/18/13
Wow, I think this is a wonderful write. So full of wonder of the Valentine Moose and her baby. I would have returned to Value City after hearing you describe them! I am also as a child about these things.

Beautifully written and enjoyed!
02/19/13
Phew! - I could do with a shot of your energetic writing ability. I get a picture of you thrashing the keyboard with steam rising and spurting in all directions. Great descriptive writing!

Colin Swann (Gold Membership)
02/19/13
I have to laugh at the above comment. That's my sentiment entirely. Oh how I long for such vibrant energy. Keep channelling it into your writing for the Lord and you'll go far. Well done.