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This was such a sweet and powerful read. It seemed like it might be a true story, but didn't know for sure. Your story reminded me of the chat my son and I recently had about what an honor it is to be adopted because that is exactly how each one of us are able to become a part of God's precious family as you show at the end of your story. I loved how you put about the final note being the one in your heart placed there by the Lord Himself! The only thing I would do differently is I would have the verse in Revelation by itself or with the sentence immediately following as the end of your story. That is a very sold and strong ending for this piece. Your additional two sentences are repeating what you already have stated about hoping the reader will have their own note, so I think it is just a weaker note (ha) to end the story on. But all and all quite a lovely piece. If this piece is a true story I am glad you realized that you have a permanent home with Him!
02/15/13
This is beautiful and beautifully written. Great work on this one.
02/18/13
I enjoyed reading this story about adoption. So glad I've been adopted by Christ. Well done.
A beautifully written story on why we all need to be adopted. Thank you.
God bless.
Lovely.
Wonderful is our Father whose love is and and abounding forever and ever!

Well done, dear sister!
02/21/13
God Bless & Congrats~