The Official Writing Challenge
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02/15/13
This was such a sweet and powerful read. It seemed like it might be a true story, but didn't know for sure. Your story reminded me of the chat my son and I recently had about what an honor it is to be adopted because that is exactly how each one of us are able to become a part of God's precious family as you show at the end of your story. I loved how you put about the final note being the one in your heart placed there by the Lord Himself! The only thing I would do differently is I would have the verse in Revelation by itself or with the sentence immediately following as the end of your story. That is a very sold and strong ending for this piece. Your additional two sentences are repeating what you already have stated about hoping the reader will have their own note, so I think it is just a weaker note (ha) to end the story on. But all and all quite a lovely piece. If this piece is a true story I am glad you realized that you have a permanent home with Him!
02/15/13
This is beautiful and beautifully written. Great work on this one.
02/18/13
I enjoyed reading this story about adoption. So glad I've been adopted by Christ. Well done.
02/19/13
A beautifully written story on why we all need to be adopted. Thank you.
God bless.
02/20/13
Lovely.
02/21/13
Wonderful is our Father whose love is and and abounding forever and ever!

Well done, dear sister!
02/21/13
God Bless & Congrats~