The Official Writing Challenge
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I loved the word pictures in this very mysterious story. You really left me wanting more... Who was Adam? Where was Ladara? (I probably am spelling that wrong)? This is a very unique piece on the word staff. Was this Adam in "Adam and Eve"? And was he being led back to Eve and his family? I can hardly wait for the next installment. Very colorful descriptions in your piece. I really liked this.
02/07/13
I really enjoyed the way you painted this scene with words and descriptive adjectives. Very intriguing piece.

One grammar note: it's = it is
("Maybe it's best I stay here and die.")
Possessive its has no apostrophe.
("its foul stench")

As the last commenter wrote, I look forward to reading more!
02/08/13
Creative and clever way of presenting the topic. Nicely done.

God bless~
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