The Official Writing Challenge
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You have written about a very common and yet complicated problem, and I like the fact that you have not resolved it within this short story, at least not completely, which is usually how real life goes. I enjoyed the tension in this piece. I'm wondering if you could give a few more specifics, especially early on so that the reader isn't just left with the stopped thoughts of the lady sitting in the dark. Let the reader her more of what was said between the friends, or more of the specific thoughts in the mind of the lady in the dark. This scene was painted well. Thank you for sharing.
You managed to write an easy flowing and interesting piece. It was authentic in dialogue and the inner conflict was glaringly apparent. The picture you created in the readers mind was crystal clear. I felt the hurt and confusion from the "friend and their behavior." Great job, excellent writing. And, clearly on topic in a unique and subtle fashion.

Good way of wrapping up with leaving the reader wanting more info!

God bless~
You did a great job with this piece by introducing the conflict right in the beginning, as it pulls the reader into the story. My heart aches for the pain of the MC and for Marie. I like how you left the ending open so that the reader can hear the message God intends. It often may be different for different people.