The Official Writing Challenge
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02/02/13
Lovely flowing and beautiful in its depth and understanding. God bless~
I think this poem is quite lovely. I enjoyed how you started at the very beginning and carried the reader to the beautiful ending.

I did stumble a tiny bit over the rhymes Paul and known and found some lines confusing. Although I think some different punctuation might have helped with that.

But I also know that punctuation can be a style choice. Usually poetry isn't my favorite genre because I feel like I'm missing something important that my brain can't hear. And though I did probably miss some of the subtle nuances in this piece, I could still feel the passion in each word. You did a great job with this by leaving me feeling loved and blessed. That's always a great way to leave a reader.
02/04/13
Wonderful piece, for wonderful Peace! This really exalts the name of our Christ. Thank you. Sorry I don't have the critiquing skills, for this genre. Just keep on writing, you're doing great.
Absolutely beautiful . . .