Home Read What's New Join
My Account Login

Read Our Devotional             2016 Opportunities to be Published             Detailed Navigation

The HOME for Christian writers! The Home for Christian Writers!
The Official Writing Challenge



how it works
submission rules
guidelines for
choosing a level


submit your entry
read current entries
read past entries
challenge winners

Our Daily Devotional HERE
Place it on your site or
receive it daily by email.



how it works   Submit

Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Rest (01/17/13)

TITLE: Time Wounds All Heels.
By Judith Gayle Smith


Time wounds all heels.

Rushing to age seventy, I no longer meet the “spring chicken” criteria. Overweight, my body rolls in folds to the dinner table. Taste buds clamor for sweet and salt. Paper towels placed strategically soak up perspiration to keep rashes at bay. Having become somewhat odiferous, I enjoy perfumes more. Living in colorful floaty caftans for ease of movement as well as concealing body image.

My eyelids slowly fold to meet the bags under my eyes, difficult to squint. Surprising little red blood vessels appear on my eyes, as “floaters” plague me when I close them. Mascara and eyeliner do not help. Twisting eyelashes keep me pulling them out. Fingernails break as I stare at them.

Wattles! My neck is wrinkling. The thin skin on my arms and legs is drooping. I seem to be melting.

Plugged into a CPap to keep my marriage stronger than my snores. I listen to my Bible to fall asleep with a mind decluttered from everyday angst - keeping my whirlygig thoughts corralled. I have constant nightmares of my teeth crumbling in my mouth, forgetting where I live and who I love.

Uncomfortable. Disconsolate. Too many “weather veins” with each barometric pressure drop. How do I feel about aging? Aging! How and when has this happened? Succumbing to gravity. Enthroned in a power chair for ambulation. Was I ever a spring chick? Did I ever spring? I have become the replica of my beloved Gram. Except she was 4’10” and weighed about 100 pounds.

Soon to be planted. What I become in the Christ is far superior to what I have accomplished hitherto. I fear God. Therefore I do not fear death. No tears, no sorrows, no agonizing over crow’s feet. No more shuffling to the kitchen in fuzzy slippers and forgetting why I am in there.

This no longer a spring chicken can rest now. The spring in my heart overflows with trust, knowing that I am but a small seed planted, awaiting the Resurrection. I will blossom into the creature God has prepared me to be.

Thank You, Father – forgiving through and for giving Jesus to save me from myself.

The opinions expressed by authors may not necessarily reflect the opinion of FaithWriters.com.
If you died today, are you absolutely certain that you would go to heaven? You can be right now. CLICK HERE

JOIN US at FaithWriters for Free. Grow as a Writer and Spread the Gospel.

This article has been read 588 times
Member Comments
Member Date
Judith Gayle Smith01/25/13
Full of self - the heart ready for Satan's favorite attacks. Put on the full armor of God instead of agonizing over your wrinkles and extra chins. Worthy of thought?
C D Swanson 01/25/13
The humor in this entry concerning the "aging" in place is something many people focus on. In the end of the entry, it's good to see that you are in God's arena and able to withstand the natural aging process and flesh which ultimately mean nothing in the eternity.

Good job with this piece.

God bless~
Francie Snell 01/25/13
This piece of masterful work is beyond my capabilities to give it the true credit it deserves.
Though I walk, I cannot fly like your writing does. You are an inspiration to me and challenges me to go deeper with my thoughts, and then higher in realizing that our loving Lord has a special plan for our lives, here and in the hereafter. Thank you for writing your heart's message. It is a true blessing to me.
Virgil Youngblood 01/25/13
Diamonds are refined by chipping away. Your perspective on the aging process sparkles and was an enjoyable read.
Mildred Sheldon01/26/13
I loved how you described getting older. Gave me a chuckle. Thank you for sharing.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/26/13
Oh I love this! From your sardonic title to self-deprecating humor, I ate up every word. Though I'm about 20 something years younger than your MC, I can totally relate (which is kind of scary when I think about it). I love the way the MC doesn't fear death. It reminds me a lot of my mom and grandma. I pray and am working to be that confident myself. You wrote a delightful story.
Sheldon Bass 01/27/13
Ah, chuckles right on time. Loved the humorous twists on something we all must face, some sooner than later. "Rest" assured, you did well.
Allison Egley 01/27/13
Hehehe This is cute!

There was an incomplete sentence or two, but nothing that detracted from the piece as a whole.

Nice job with this. I had to laugh when you mentioned your grandma... I'm about 4'10" also, but not quite 100 lbs. :D
Lillian Rhoades 01/28/13
I just love creative titles!
Your article was insightful and humorous.

I think I understood what you meant by "Soon to be planted" but a sentence or two to relate it to what came next may have brought more clarity to the point you were making. As noted, there were a few incomplete sentences, but you did a great job with verb usage: Clamor, plagued, shuffling...

Lillian Rhoades 01/28/13
P.S. The Judges's opinions always preempt mine.:-)
Loren T. Lowery01/28/13
Self awareness and God awareness - now that is definitely something to think about and you've presented it in a very humorous and consoling way.
lynn gipson 01/28/13
Oh man, (or lady) you must have been reading my mind. Was I ever spring? Nightmares about getting lost and I already lost my real teeth.
God Bless you for sharing this excellent, wonderful writing. Happy to know I am not the only one. I LOVED this.
Myrna Noyes01/30/13
You described aging with wonderful humor and clarity! It's something we all face eventually, and at the end of your piece you remind us it's nothing to fear if we have Jesus! You have some vivid word choices here that paint a great picture! :)
Myrna Noyes01/31/13
Congratulations on your "Highly Commended" for this great piece! :)
C D Swanson 01/31/13
Congrats God bless~
Judith Gayle Smith01/31/13
Thank you all for your wonderful words of encouragent! I have been too long apart from Faithwriters, unable to financially move from the Silver level. What joy to find I was allowed to participate once again in the Writing Challenge! My hubby was so pleased I started writing again, he encouraged me to "try for the Gold"! And so I have . . .