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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Rest (01/17/13)

TITLE: Just As You Are


Just as you are, my child
With no good works in your hand
Just as you are, my daughter,
I will always make you stand.

Stop your striving, stop your reaching
There is nothing you can do
To increase or improve on
What I have done for you.

You can climb the highest mountain
Or swim the deepest sea
But youíll never, no, not ever
Change the way I feel for thee.

You can publish books and novels
Or just whisper Me a prayer
You donít have to earn approval
Itís enough that I am there.

I can see how hard youíre trying
Donít you know that you are known?
Rest in my love, Iím waiting
Iíll never leave you alone.

Donít forget that I have bid you
Come to me, Iím your reward
I am all youíve ever needed
Your Savior, and your Lord.

Thank you, sweet Abba, Father,
I know that it is true
That You love me for who I am
And not for what I do.

Sometimes I just forget
That Iím a child at your feet
And I feel as though accomplishments
Would make me more complete

So I thank you for reminding me
That I already have whatís best
For You alone are my reward
And I can simply rest.

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Judith Gayle Smith01/24/13
Susan Montaperto01/25/13
Beautifully written. Thank you.
CD Swanson 01/25/13
Beautiful words and message. I loved this so much, simply beautiful!
Your heart for the Lord is apparent.

God Bless~
Mildred Sheldon01/26/13
I loved this. It was exquisitely written and covered what rest truly is.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/26/13
This is beautiful. I feel like you checked into my head and knew the exact words I needed to hear. The only red ink I might have is to put quotes around the part God is talking to you. The sudden shift in the POV the last two stanzas surprised me and I wondered if I missed something. But other than a couple of tiny punctuation marks, I think this is near perfection. You did a stunning job with this.
Francie Snell 01/26/13
What a wonderful and profound talent you have. I love this poem. It makes my heart dance to its' rhythm and rhyming truth about our tendency to strive for something we already have;His love and acceptance. Great job on this.
Sheldon Bass 01/27/13
What a wonderful message, one that hits me where I needed hit. Your words here caused tension to be released. Felt every word.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/29/13
This is beautiful. I had tears in my eyes. I think it would flow quite nicely as a song.

The only suggestion I might have is one part made me stumble just a bit. Perhaps if you switch it to this:
I often think accomplishments
Would make me feel more complete
I could be totally off, but just wanted to show you what I meant.

You have a beautiful, touching poem. You brought the MC out of the dark and into the light. This left me with a smile and a sense of hope.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/29/13
Sorry about the double post. I had been perusing the ones that people threw bricks for (a thread on the message board asking for more critique and providing a link to your story) I thought this had been thrown and you asked for more feedback. I did really enjoy your poem and it deserves three posts from me because it is so good. :)