The Official Writing Challenge
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01/11/13
Such an important reminder about Who truly deserves our continual worship.

I think if you chose one of the girls to really get in her head from the beginning, and let us experience everything she does (seeing through her eyes) it would strengthen this piece even more.

Story is a powerful way to convey messages. Keep writing them!

This is a great story. You do a delightful job of mixing just the right amount of telling and showing. I think you covered the topic in a fresh and interesting way while still delivering a powerful message. You also managed to get your point across without sounding preachy. Nicely done.
01/14/13
Good story, good message. I enjoyed this so much.

God bless~
01/15/13
Good story. I like the way you moved it from paying homage to an earthly king and showed how much more we should be paying our respects to our heavenly king.