The Official Writing Challenge
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12/13/12
Good poem. I like the analogy between the game of life and any game. However, in the first stanza "Lets" should be "let" to agree with "see", which is the correct verb for "People". In the last stanza you do not need a full stop after "know".
12/14/12
This was a beautiful poem that flowed right into my heart. Powerful words and message. God bless~
This is a powerful piece. My heart hurts for the heart of the MC. I know how easy it can be to hide away-yet though we may be capable of shielding ourselves from others God always knows where to find us.