The Official Writing Challenge
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12/09/12
What wonderful memories. A time when the flag was honored, God respected, We didn't apologize for celebrating the Seasons of the Lord. A time when children played together, learned together, grew together. Thank you for sharing your memories
This is a sweet story that took me back to a simpler time. I could see the chalk dust and almost smell it too.

I noticed you started in the past tense and then here: If I listen you slipped to the presence. Try to keep the tense consistent.

Your story brought a smile to my heart and I really enjoyed going on this journey with you as my guide. You have a knack for storytelling.
12/11/12
I smiled reading this...I recalled with vivid detail my own youth. Like Shann, I too could smell the chalk.

I was a school monitor, and had several tasks to do. I relived them through this piece. Great piece of writing.

God bless~