The Official Writing Challenge
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11/23/12
Sometimes it is hard to make time for people when we are caught up in the rush of our activities. I'm glad that Andy cared enough to try.
This is an interesting story. One of the things I like the most is it shows that the pastor is human. Part of him was worried about little things like being on time for church when another's life was being held in the balance. I think it's super important for people to remember that ministers are human and can make mistakes. Just like the rest of us, Jesus died for their sins too. Nice take on the topic.
11/25/12
This is a nice entry on the topic of time. You clearly have a gift for storytelling.

Just a suggestion: I would have loved to see a little more depth to your characters. A simplistic story is fine, but maybe work on creating characters that allow readers to experience more of an emotional connection to them. This would add a new level to your storytelling. Overall, well done!
11/27/12
Good job...nice dialogue, and an altogether enjoyable read. Thanks.
God bless~