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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Irritated (11/08/12)

TITLE: This Old Computer
By lynn gipson
11/13/12


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When this old computer has a bad day,
And my internet service fades away,
Right in the middle of a long email,
Suddenly all of its functions fail.

My temper flares as I bite my tongue,
No longer patient as when I was young,
Trying once more to get my words out,
Down it goes as I let out a shout!

Few things get on my nerves anymore,
But this old computer sure makes me sore,
I love it more than my newest shoes,
So why does it have to give me the blues?

On sleepless nights it’s my best friend,
I can surf or write for hours on end,
Sometimes it works like an old techno pro,
At others it works for gray hair to grow.

To say I get miffed is to put it mildly,
My blood pressure pumps and rises wildly,
I don’t understand why it does me this way,
I treat it with love and care everyday.

It returns my affection with sudden freezes,
And I have to ask for help from Jesus,
“Dear Lord, take the wheel!” I pray,
“It’s just a machine!” I hear Him say.

These are the times when I must listen,
To what amounts to His great wisdom,
“Though this old thing may sputter and stall,
Be grateful to have a computer al all!”


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/16/12
I love this. I thought it was a hoot and you had me smiling throughout. Your rhymes were a delight and the words just flowed off the page. I can so totally relate to the MC as I'm certain these wretched machines have conspired with glass repairman for if not for my husband, the computer geek, I'd be tossing this dastardly thing out the window! Splendid bit of poetry. :)
Melanie Kerr 11/17/12
I think we can all relate to those words. A good poem.
Allison Egley 11/17/12
Oh, this is great! It reminds me of the time when I was in high school and one of the computers in the publications room ate my entire yearbook page I was working on... I had just saved it and it was nearly complete, and it left me with a completely blank page. I was just a bit irritated, as is evident by the fact that I remember it with perfect clarity more than 10 years later.... :D
Ada Nett11/17/12
You did have fun with this. Nice catchy rhythm. A delight to read.
Danielle King 11/18/12
I never thought I'd grow to love my computer either, but I do. And like you, on sleepless nights it's my best mate ever! I enjoyed your cute and catchy poem.
Bea Edwards 11/18/12
Perfect topic choice that we can all relate to. Big smiles at your cute rant!
I actually drove over a computer printer (repeatedly)after tossing it into our office parking lot- with my truck one weekend years ago...long story but it began with some simple computer issues that progressed into a daylong ordeal which transferred over to the printer and by golly I was done with all that nonsense at that point. Wish I would have prayed instead :-}
Joanne Sher 11/18/12
This one was so VERY fun - and yes, of course, I could totally relate. A favorite of mine (the poem, not the irritation LOL).
Marie Hearty 11/19/12
I can certainly relate to this poem. I have had a few computers over the years and I know what it is like to struggle with them. I was smiling throughout the entire read. Thanks for bringing a smile to my face. :)

God Bless!
Myrna Noyes11/19/12
:) This cute poem made me smile! Many of us can really empathize with your computer experiences! The rhythm and flow of your piece was very good, and the message at the end was excellent! Great job! :)
Noel Mitaxa 11/20/12
Computerful!
Very creative and honest, a few home truths for those of us who are closer to the crypt than the cradle. ;-(
Noel Mitaxa 11/22/12
PS Congratulations on your win.
CD Swanson 11/22/12
Wow- Congrats! God bless~
Beth LaBuff 11/22/12
You made me smile as I read this. Great message! Congrats on your Editor's Choice award, Lynn.
Pam Ford Davis 11/22/12
Congratulations! Take a bow and keep up the good work.

Wing His Words!
Bea Edwards 11/24/12
You go granma!!
Loren T. Lowery11/26/12
Lynn, thanks for the smile today and congratulations on your EC. Your poem definitely got into the the minds of the readers.