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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Clothes (11/02/12)

TITLE: The Crinoline Dress
By lynn gipson


Pink ribbons tied into pretty bows,
Adorn my dress of layers and rows,
I must be dreaming because I feel,
Like surely this vision canít be real!

A pauperís daughter when I was born,
Flannel lined jeans I had always worn,
Longing to dress like the girl down the street,
I feared in my heart it would never be.

Worn out clothes and scuffed up shoes,
Always ashamed at Sunday school,
Doll like dresses were worn in those days,
With little black shoes so shiny they glazed.

Praying each night for something pretty,
Then Mama took me into the city,
Suddenly feeling a thump in my chest,
I saw the most beautiful crinoline dress!

I tried it on, and it was just my size,
So pretty I couldnít believe my eyes,
Though Mama smiled at me at the time,
I dared not think it could ever be mine.

Reaching into her sparse pocket book,
For a five dollar bill as her hands shook,
With happy tears she said ďItís yours!Ē
A great sacrifice for a mother so poor.

Next we went to a second hand store,
Where we found what we were looking for,
A shiny pair of Mary Jane shoes,
No one would ever know they were used.

I feel like a princess at church today,
As smiles and ahs are directed my way,
I thank Godís grace for a dream come true,
In my crinoline dress and almost new shoes!

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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/08/12
This poem tells such a sweet story. I could picture an illustration next to each verse. It would make a delightful children's book.
Laura Manley11/08/12
Thisi truly touched my heart. Your rhythm seemed almost flawless and the words you spoke rang as I remembered my childhood. Very well done.
Colin Swann11/09/12
Wow! This is gorgeous! Loved it to bits! Thank you for sharing your poetic talent.

Colin (Gold Member)
Allison Egley 11/09/12
This is really good.

My only very, very tiny bit of red ink is that the rhymes and rhythms were a bit off at times.

Love the story this tells, though. Nice job.
Randy Foncree11/10/12
Very well written poem...thanks for sharing...I enjoyed reading it very much...
Lillian Rhoades 11/10/12
Well done in content and style!
Danielle King 11/12/12
This is a sweet entry. It reminded me of my own childhood when my mother would rummage around the market stalls looking for a cheap length of material to sew me a dress. She couldn't afford to buy me new clothes. Thanks for writing this lovely poem. It's brought back fond memories.
Myrna Noyes11/12/12
I really liked the story this poem told! I always loved my black patent leathers and a pretty dress when I was young, so I can totally understand how this little girl felt! Good job! :)
Bea Edwards 11/13/12
Thank you for this lovely poem about a little girls dream and a mothers sacrifice. Pretty and poignant.
Noel Mitaxa 11/14/12
Very simple, evocative style that reawakened memories of feeling the pinch when I was a kid, when such high-cost items were not all that expensive in today's prices. Not that we were poor, we just didn't have any money.
Camille (C D) Swanson 11/22/12
Congrats! God Bless~