The Official Writing Challenge
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This poem tells such a sweet story. I could picture an illustration next to each verse. It would make a delightful children's book.
11/08/12
Thisi truly touched my heart. Your rhythm seemed almost flawless and the words you spoke rang as I remembered my childhood. Very well done.
11/09/12
Wow! This is gorgeous! Loved it to bits! Thank you for sharing your poetic talent.

Colin (Gold Member)
11/09/12
This is really good.

My only very, very tiny bit of red ink is that the rhymes and rhythms were a bit off at times.

Love the story this tells, though. Nice job.
11/10/12
Very well written poem...thanks for sharing...I enjoyed reading it very much...
11/10/12
Well done in content and style!
11/12/12
This is a sweet entry. It reminded me of my own childhood when my mother would rummage around the market stalls looking for a cheap length of material to sew me a dress. She couldn't afford to buy me new clothes. Thanks for writing this lovely poem. It's brought back fond memories.
11/12/12
I really liked the story this poem told! I always loved my black patent leathers and a pretty dress when I was young, so I can totally understand how this little girl felt! Good job! :)
11/13/12
Thank you for this lovely poem about a little girls dream and a mothers sacrifice. Pretty and poignant.
11/14/12
Very simple, evocative style that reawakened memories of feeling the pinch when I was a kid, when such high-cost items were not all that expensive in today's prices. Not that we were poor, we just didn't have any money.
11/22/12
Congrats! God Bless~