The Official Writing Challenge
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This is an intriguing story. You grabbed my interest and held it throughout.

I did notice quite a few little errors like missing quotation marks, question marks, Gods son should be God's son. Also the fact about it being twenty below zero feels unreal. A man would die of hypothermia in almost no time if out in the elements with that temperature. If you polish it up, fix the errors and work on making it more authentic (including some of the dialog that didn't feel natural) you'd have a fantastic piece.

I liked your modern take on the good Samaritan story. Many have written stories this week with the Bible verse you uses but I thought your POV was a different spin on it and I enjoyed this story.
11/10/12
I enjoyed the read..it kept my interest throughout...the only critique I would have is that there are parts of it that seem unrealistic to me. Other than that, good story...