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This is a powerful story. You definitely covered the topic but in a different way than most.

A couple of things made me scratch my head. Would dog tags really stop a bullet? (Of course, with God anything is possible) and the other thing was the second bullet hole--I guess I can see the dog tags deflecting the bullet so it would exit another part of the jersey but then there would be cracked ribs and burns from the bullet. I know I'm nitpicking but I do see a lot of potential in this story or I wouldn't bother to question these things. But I also understand literary license as I once wrote a story about a baby whose birthmark gave the parents instructions. :)

I do like the message a lot. Forgiveness isn't easy but what a delightful example the young MC would be. I also liked how you showed a darker side of park but with God's grace even the darkest places can be illuminated. Nice job. Keep writing those stories God puts on your heart. This one is quite timely as Veteran's Day nears.
11/03/12
Such great meaning here. I loved how God saved the boys and how the MC was more concerned for the veteran than he was for himself. Thank you for this uplifting story.

God bless!
11/03/12
The phrase, "And a child shall lead them," keeps coming to mind as I read your story. As a grandmother, I could imagine the chaos, and terror of all in the park that day. Yet in the middle of fear and pain, Tommy, remembers to check on the others, he also shows a degree of forgiveness most adults can only hope to achieve. I could only imagine the frightened, emotionally wounded vet possibly only just coming to term with his actions, seeing and hearing the Lord's forgiveness through a very special child.