The Official Writing Challenge
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08/31/12
I loved this. It was well-thought out, and well-spoken. It drew me in, and made me want more. I think, that was a bit of a problem though. It was like I had read the back jacket of a book and I thought, Yes! I want to read this. But there was nothing else to read.

Whether this is fiction or non-fiction, there is a great story here. A great message. I would love to see an expanded version of this piece.
08/31/12
Wow - powerful. This brief entry stirred up many emotions, messages and images...excellent.

God bless~
WOW! Short, concise and to the point. Sin is like that.
Sin will take you
further than you
want to go.

Sin will keep you
longer than you
want to stay.

Sin will cost you
more than you want
to pay.
That is on my bedroom wall. I don't know who said it, but it is true and your story conveyed that perfectly.
I enjoyed this. It was short and to the point but you did a nice job of speaking for Eve.
Congratulations for ranking 6th in level 2!