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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Sweet to the Taste (08/23/12)

TITLE: Sweet Victory
By Gary Morris
08/30/12


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Im just an ordinary worker, always as busy as can be. Occasionally I stray from my friends and scout around, just to see what I can get into. On one such day, I ran upon something like I had never seen or heard.

Honestly, I think I saw a super hero. I mean one with real power.
While scouting around, I overheard a ladies soft voice, Son, please listen to your father!

Mom, said someone with a masculine voice, I know what I want, and I want this girl for my wife.

Son, please!

A deeper voice spoke up, Boy, there are more beautiful women back home than you will ever find among those foreigners. Im afraid you are going to regret this.

I quickly moved closer, not wanting to miss this free show, but careful not to be seen. As I swept past a small bush, I came face to face with a strapping young Romeo. His long dark hair waved in the wind.

I promptly dodged and circled around to follow. The fragrance that trailed behind him was quite fascinating. I certainly did not want to miss this opportunity.

He had walked quite a distance when all of a sudden the fierce lion plunged at him from deep within the bush. I was so afraid! I knew this was not going to be a fair fight, and I could hardly bear to watch.

Just as I was about to flee, I heard a horrendous roar from the massive king, and I turned to see the most incredible sight. The young man was wrestling the lion!

He threw the massive creature to the ground with a thud. Then he lit into the beast like a raging cave man would tear a small kid goat into pieces. I could not believe my eyes!

This guy must have been a super hero! He fought the lion with strength like I had never seen before, then left the lifeless body to the scavengers of the field.

I could not wait to for my friends to get the buzz on this fight. I zoomed back as fast as I could fly. My coworkers helped spread the word and soon even the queen was aware of what I had seen.

She immediately commissioned a posse to check the spoil for potential benefits to the colony. Soon they returned with the announcement - a perfect place to start a branch operation was now available.

I was so excited when the orders came to join the team in building this new facility. However, I was somewhat surprised to learn that our location was inside the carcass of the lion! He had been devoured in no time, and only his carcass remained.

Everything was a buzz as we started this project and soon we were the proud owners of a brand new manufacturing company. Sweet was the sound of success. Soon this would be like a brand new promised land, flowing with honey if nothing else.

I was so thrilled that I barely heard the commotion and the announcement of the intruder. I quickly aimed for an attack and was just about to pierce the robber when I caught a familiar fragrance.

I stopped and re-evaluated the situation only to realize that I was about to attack the super hero! Yes, the Romeo who had killed the lion only days ago was back, and he wanted our product!

He wanted my honey! I knew that I could not stop him. With all the workers joining together, we could not stop a man with this his power.

Wow! He exclaimed. This is sweet. I must share this with mom and dad.

With that, he tore the place apart and walked away gripping our cone as if we were not even there.

Thats him! That is him! That is the super hero I was telling you about! I announced to the colony, hoping to appease their anger just a bit.

Im not sure who the gentleman was, but Ive never seen power like that before. The great creator must have empowered him with a super power.


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CD (Camille) Swanson 08/31/12
Interesting take on the topic. I enjoyed this clever entry. Thanks.

God bless~
Mildred Sheldon08/31/12
I enjoyed this rather unusual tale about sweets as told by a bee. Interesting.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 09/04/12
I liked this unique POV. Though I did instantly sense that the MC was a bee (or maybe an ant but because the topic is sweet, I suspected bee) it still was intriguing and I was eager to keep reading.

I noticed a couple of tiny typos-- ladies should be lady's and Mom and Dad should be capitalized when used as a name.

I think you did a grand job of thinking outside of the box and encouraging others to see God's miracles in a new light. You did a nice job on this piece and I enjoyed it thoroughly.