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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Banquet - deadline 8-16-12 10 am NY time (08/09/12)

TITLE: THIS BANQUET WENT SOUTH!
By Janice Wappel
08/13/12


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Long, long ago…… in a land far away; A true story is told…
An evil nobleman named Haman was honored by King Xerxes…
The king commanded his royal officials to kneel before Haman…
So, they did as the king commanded and gave homage to Haman…
Everyone … except a Jewish man named Mordecai…
When Haman learned through the grapevine that Mordecai would not bow to him…
HE WAS FURIOUS! How dare this man not honor him?...
So, Haman came up with a plan to eliminate Mordecai…
But wait; why rid the land of only one Jew, why not destroy them all?...
Haman began to put his plan in place…
He plotted and planned and schemed…
But before he could do the dastardly deed…
Queen Esther got wind of his nasty plan and decided on a “little scheme of her own”…
She went to her husband The King and sweetly said;…
“If it please the king, come with Haman to a banquet I’ve prepared for him”…
The words pleased the king very much; so off to the banquet room they went…
But the king knew Ester wanted more…
“What is it you want, my queen?”…
“Here is what I want; If the king favors me and is pleased to do what I desire…
Let the king and Haman come again tomorrow to another banquet I will fix for them”…
The king was pleased and invited Haman again, sending him home for the night…

Haman went home and bragged to his wife about the private dinner that night…
But, Haman was still unhappy… and sulked like a baby before his wife…
Mordecai continued to ignore him… and that was too much for Haman’s pride...
Haman moaned and groaned and twisted his hands,…
“What to do, what to do?”He cried to his wife…
“Build a gallows and have him hanged” His wife smugly suggests…
Oh, the idea brought Haman such joy… “A brilliant idea” he thought…
Haman had the gallows built, seventy-five feet high, in fact…
But before Haman got the words out of his mouth…
It was time for the next lovely banquet to start…
“Queen Esther, what do you want?” The King asked his queen once more…
“An enemy, a very bad man; this vile Haman wants to kill my people”…
“Please save us from this man!” She cried…
The king was outraged… how could this be?… Then, without blinking an eye…
The king decided old Haman’s fate…
“HANG HAMAN ON THOSE GALLOWS” He roared with all his might!
The banquet was over… The Jews were saved… Evil Haman was hanged that night…
Please keep this one thought in mind…
The next time you are invited to a banquet by a queen…
“DON’T mess with God’s people”…
OR…
YOU could be hanged!...


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CD Swanson 08/16/12
Nice job with the story of Esther. I enjoyed it and the powerful message at the end.

Thanks. God Bless~
Patsy Hallum08/17/12
great take on Esther. I wish more people were afraid to mess with God. Keep writing for the Lord!
Mildred Sheldon08/17/12
I love how you used the story of Esther. If more people held God in high regard we would not be in the mess we are in.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/18/12
This is a lovely retelling of the familiar Bible story. You did a nice job of laying it out.

For me personally the ellipses were very distracting. Any punctuation if overused can have the opposite effect than intended. I also wish you had added some more showing. In one line you describe how he twisted and wrung his hands. That's a perfect example of showing. I wish you had painted more pictures in my mind.

You did a nice job of covering the topic. You left me with a smile on your last paragraph. That's always a good thing to do--end with something memorable and you definitely did that. Good job.