The Official Writing Challenge
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08/16/12
Nice conclusion. The ending of a story can make or break it...and your ending was clearly the former. The overall story extremely clever and right on topic.

God Bless~
08/17/12
Nice story with a clear message. This flowed smoothly and your ending paragraph wrapped it up with a godly bow.
This is an interesting story. I've always heard that parable as the servants were given money. I really liked the talent instead. It's so true that if we hide our gifts away we can't ever get better or find we have more talents than we thought.

One thing I might suggest is to tighten your writing up a bit. You repeat some things in the second paragraph that you had already mentioned like professional judged and the dream of the catering company.

You covered the topic in an interesting way. The best part for me was to look at this story with fresh eyes. That's one of the reasons God calls us to write--to help people think about the scriptures and to hear them in a way that shows the Holy Spirit is at work.
I enjoyed this very much. It was right on target. Thank you for sharing.