The Official Writing Challenge
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08/09/12
Sweet and tender. I enjoyed this touching story, it sought to bring out many important messages, and you've managed to do that hands-down. Loved it. Thanks.

God bless~
This is really sweet. I liked how you showed the love between the siblings.

The only thing I wished was to know some more information about your characters. I learned a lot from the dialog but would be able to picture it if you included some body language.

You really showed how love can be painful at times. It's more important to be honest and offer help then to say nothing or do nothing. So many people tell little lies so as to not hurt someone's feelings. This is a nice reminder.
08/12/12
I felt the conflict between the sisters and I enjoyed the way you handled the situation. You did a good job of writing. Thanks.
08/13/12
I really like this conversational piece. I like how you haven't introduced the characters; just found them in a conversation about the needs of one of the sisters. Very nice approach, in my opinion.
08/16/12
Congrats! God Bless
Congratulations for your ribbon and for ranking 13 overall!