The Official Writing Challenge
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07/27/12
Interesting retelling of the feeding the multitudes. Well written and very "out of the box." I enjoyed it.
Thanks. God Bless~
I've read several fish and bread stories this quarter but yours was from a totally different POV. I liked the modern spin you put on it. Telling the story in this way helps modern kids really understand what it might be like out there listening to Jesus.
08/01/12
This could be a great way to present this bible story to young people. It has the the flavor of the orginal story plus the interesting extra facts you included. Such as the remark about fast foods.

Nicely written.
Congratulations for ranking 6th in level two!