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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Potluck (Meal or Gathering) Deadline 7-26-12 @ 10 AM NY Time (07/19/12)

TITLE: More Than a Magician
By Gary Morris
07/26/12


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Dude, listen to what happened to me today! I had the coolest meal! My friend, Jotham and I have been off work several days now since the fisherman parked their boats and we haven’t had fish to clean. So no fish, no work, and no money, catch my drift?

Jotham ran over to my house last night and asked me to go with him this morning to watch some guy do magic tricks. Mom and Dad thought it was a waste of time, but Jotham promised it would be worth it. I gave him my promise, and man, I’m glad I did.

The roosters crowed so loudly this morning! I mean, all over the neighborhood, they were in sync crowing loud enough to wake the entire city. I guess I was just anxious or something like that. I could hardly sleep last night, thinking about the magician we were going to see.

I laughed as I overheard my parents discussing the guy.

“Don’t you think you should give Jotham something to do today to keep him from running after that demon possessed magician?” Mom complained to Dad.

“Oh he will be fine. He is just going along with his friends. Besides, I would not talk about the guy. He may just be the real thing.” Dad replied.

“You know there is no way he could do all those tricks without some kind of power. Didn’t you hear about him interrupting an entire wedding down south? He was pretending to make wine!” Mom exclaimed.

Dad quickly changed the subject and tried to rush Mom with breakfast.
“I’m starved, and I have to be at work soon.”

I split man. I did not want to wait around on breakfast although I knew I’d be hungry later. I could pick up some fish or something for lunch at one of the street vendors.

I laughed at Jotham when I arrived at his house. Man, his mom is so over protective of him. He was waiting on me with a sack lunch! I mean, a sack lunch?

“Oh man,” I yelled to him, “grow up! No one our age carries a sack lunch anymore! I gave that up in junior high!”

“Shut up,” Jotham whispered, “you may be proud I’ve got this later! I heard this guy attracts such a large crowd that they have to meet outside of the city, and you know what that means. There are no fast food vendors out there.”

We went on and met up with some more friends. Soon it looked as if we were heading to a sporting event. There were hundreds of people walking along, and when we got to the top of the hill everyone stopped walking and found them a seat on the ground.
Man, I did not want to sit on that dusty ground with my new duds. I had just bought these with my hard earned money, and now that I’m not working and everything. I don’t know when I’ll be able to buy any more.

Anyways, this dude was the only one standing. He was going around touching these sick people, and man, he healed them instantly! I mean, one crippled man got up and walked! I could not believe it!

There was one blind man there. I know he was blind! I remember seeing him beg down by the fishing pear. The dude touched the blind man and he could see instantly! It was unbelievable! I knew he had to be more than a magician.

Then the dude started talking about how we should be living. Man, I could feel something! It was just like he was talking only to me!

I was into it until I got distracted. My stomach started growling, and I thought I was going to starve to death!

I asked Jotham if I could have a piece of his bread, and about that time some man on the magician’s committee came and asked Jotham if the master could have his lunch for the potluck. I could not believe Jotham gave it to him?

I watched the dude. He took the food and held it up. He talked, as if he were talking to someone in the sky. Then he started breaking it up in pieces! Then it started multiplying! Everybody there got some of Jotham’s lunch. It was only a small sack lunch, but it turned into an awesome potluck!


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CD Swanson 07/27/12
Interesting retelling of the feeding the multitudes. Well written and very "out of the box." I enjoyed it.
Thanks. God Bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/01/12
I've read several fish and bread stories this quarter but yours was from a totally different POV. I liked the modern spin you put on it. Telling the story in this way helps modern kids really understand what it might be like out there listening to Jesus.
Brenda Rice 08/01/12
This could be a great way to present this bible story to young people. It has the the flavor of the orginal story plus the interesting extra facts you included. Such as the remark about fast foods.

Nicely written.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/02/12
Congratulations for ranking 6th in level two!