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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Fragrance (10/24/05)

TITLE: The Mist
By Kate Wells
10/30/05


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Meghan stood in front of the foggy bathroom mirror. As it began to clear, she saw her green eyes looking back at her from the reflection. She leaned forward and examined the tiny little lines at the corners of her eyes. Twenty-eight was starting to show. And still no husband. She wrinkled her nose at the mirror's report and glanced at the clock.

She did not see the invisible, wispy, substance that had begun to swirl around her ankles.

She finished her morning routine and was soon on her way to the office, coffee cup in hand. She was unaware that the mist had followed her and now filled her car.

Meghan drove as quickly as speed limits would allow and arrived at work with only minutes to park and get inside. She did not notice the swirling invisible substance exit with her. But she did notice her Bible on the dash board and quickly leaned in to get it. She made a mental note to herself to read on her coffee break. She didn't like to miss her time with the Lord. She almost never did.

Meghan dashed through the lobby and barely made it to the elevator before the doors closed. She sighed, relaxed a little and looked at her watch. Two minutes til 8:00. She would make it on time. As she shifted positions, She somehow managed to drop her Bible.

She started to lean over to get it but the strap of her purse slid off her shoulder and she fumbled about to keep it from spilling it's contents all over the elevator floor.

Embarrassed, she risked a look at the faces of the others in the elevator. She saw a variety of reactions. Several people looked at her Bible which had fallen open on the floor, and quickly looked away in disdain. One woman nodded toward her and smiled as if to convey a message that they had something in common. Another man clearly had a look of disgust on his face as he turned away and pretended to look at the ceiling.

She was still fumbling about trying to balance things and stooping to pick up her Bible in the limited amount of space the elevator afforded when she saw his hand. He had stretched it toward her Bible at the same time she did and he smiled as their eyes met.

"I see you read the Amplified", he said. "I like that translation, too. It really seems to open up some verses for me."

"Yes, it does", she replied and quickly checked his left hand to see if there was a ring on it. There wasn't, and she asked him which floor he worked on.

"This one", he answered, as the doors opened. "Accounting", he said, as he made his way passed the others. He put his hand on the door to prevent it's closing and said, "I'm Dan Jenkins. We have a Bible study every Friday morning at 7:00. Would you like to come?"

"Thank you", she responded with a smile. "I'm Meghan Lewis...and I'd love to."

He let go of the elevator door and waved his hand as he called back, "Friday!"

She kept her focus on his eyes...and did not notice the swirling mist around his shoulders.

Meghan made her way to her desk and sat her Bible and purse down. She thought about the reactions she had seen in the elevator When coffee break came around she sat down and opened her Bible to
2 Corinthians 15 and read;

"For we are the sweet fragrance of Christ unto God,
among those who are being saved and among those
who are perishing: To the latter it is an aroma from
death to death to the former it is an aroma from life to life

Suddenly, she understood the reactions she had seen on the elevator. If she could have seen into the spiritual realm, she would have understood the swirling substance that had permeated the air around her all morning and the effect it would have on others. The fragrance of Christ.

She closed her eyes and smiled and wondered how she was going to wait until Friday.


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terri tiffany10/31/05
Very nice! I had never read that verse before. This story held my attention all the way!:))
Jan Ackerson 11/02/05
Oooh, nice! A longer version would be great!
Garnet Miller 11/02/05
Oh! She found a man! More importantly she was given the revelation of His word. Seeing people as God intended us to, helps us to "hate the sin, but love the sinner." We can reach others when we see them as potential new creations and not old discards. Thanks for this enlightening article:)
Marilyn Schnepp 11/03/05
A lovely story, which kept my interest throughout. Can't wait for the "continuation"...what happened Friday? smile.
Shelley Snyder11/03/05
What a great story! I really enjoyed reading it. Good job!
dub W11/03/05
Super, creative, well written, a complete storyline. I loved every word. Thank you.
Nina Phillips11/03/05
This was totally wonderful story telling. Smooth, precise, and right to the mark. Easy on the eyes too. God bless ya, littlelight
Shari Armstrong 11/03/05
Nicely done - good characters
Karen Ward11/04/05
The reactions in the lift were a good slice of society. I liked his open character, I hope this ends as all good romances should! (LOL! Can't help myself!)
:) Karen
B Brenton11/04/05
The beginning of something possibly great. You see these eager hands reaching out for more?
Well, get writing!
Jeffrey Snell11/04/05
Great job! Can't say much that hasn't already been said above, but I enjoyed your writing and the intriguing spiritual perspective.
Val Clark11/06/05
Liked the physcal manifestation of aroma and how you kept its significance 'till the end. At first I thought it might be an evil thing. So glad it wasn't. Yeggy
Michelle Burkhardt11/06/05
Nice Job. The title caught my attention and the story was really sweet. I didn't like her feeling old at 28...Makes me feel really old at 38...Ha..
Debbie Sickler11/06/05
There were quite a few entries about the scent of sinners and Christians, but this was a fresh take on it. I enjoyed yours turning out to be about a potential romance. One thing I might suggest changing is the first mention of the mist. You have it beginning in the bathroom, but if she was a long time Christian, wouldn't it already be with her? Maybe just leave out the word beginning?
Deborah Porter 11/07/05
Kathleen, I just wanted to pop in and encourage you - your entry did very well in the Fragrance Challenge. You were next in line for a Level 2 award, ranking 6th for that level, and you also ranked 18th overall (out of 145 entries). That's excellent! Well done. With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)