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06/17/12
Thank you for sharing this sweet and touching story. It is usually so easy to spot a "Christian" who has a close and personal relationship with Jesus. They Light truly shines from within to all those around.

Good job. God blessz~
06/17/12
So sorry for the errors..this is the corrected version!



Thank you for sharing this sweet and touching story.

It is usually so easy to spot a "Christian" who has a close and personal relationship with Jesus. Their "Light" truly shines from within to all those around.

Good job. God bless~
This is a story that far too many people these days can relate to. Your beginning drew me right in and I was eager to read more.

I noticed a few little typos like sceptic instead of skeptic, that a good proofreader would help you catch. I wish you had said the prayer in your story. There are people who have no idea how to pray and I have a feeling that you would be great at showing that. This is just a personal opinion but when you tell a true story even with the names changed, it's a good idea to check with the person to see if they are okay with their story being out for the world to see. (You may have done just that but I just wanted to put my thoughts out for everyone.:))

You did a nice job of building your characters and writing on topic. I like the message to. The friend is a very wise woman.Good job.
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