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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Guard Your Heart (06/08/12)

TITLE: Clean inside out
By Millicent Njue


It was a whirlpool of emotions going on in her mind. She felt drawn to go with what it was her friends told her. But then there was that small silent voice inside her that told her it would be wrong to defy her parents. There was a tug of war going on in her mind right now. She did not know what to do.
June was a typical teenage girl growing up in the city. Having been brought up by Christian parents, she was cautious to remain right with God. But lately her emotions had been running riot. She was more irritable and took offense easily. Her parents, realizing their girl was growing up had done all they could to prepare her for the teenage years. But her friends were getting the better of her.
Her mother spoke to her on the need to keep a check on what it was that she got involved in. She spoke to her on the influence that her friends had on her. She reminded her day by day of the importance to keep close to God even when she did not understand herself. She kept going at her to keep her thoughts clear and to remain focused in those tumultuous years ahead.
It was a very useful lesson because she did not seem to understand herself. The matter was made worse by the fact that her friends were telling her a contrary message. That she should go with the flow. That it was fine to yield to her emotions. That her parents did not understand her and only wanted to curtail her freedom. She was torn as to who it is she was supposed to listen to.
That small still voice. Telling her to do right and not engage in evil. That little voice came to her rescue. It was well that her parents had prepared her to face life’s challenges. Most important that she knew that she needed to be careful what it was she allowed to dominate her thoughts. As that could be her undoing. If she was not careful.

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Laura Manley06/15/12
This had a good message to it and I believe it was well thought out; however, it was not as smooth a read as it could have been if you had double spaced between paragraphs. Also, I believe you could have expanded on the subject just a little. Your entry left me wanting more. As I said, I believe your entry was well thought out, but could have been expanded to satisfy this reader's longing for more.
Maria Kana Santos06/16/12
In spite of heartaches, we just keep on loving and loving our grown up children, mustn't we? This is the compassionate way of our One and Only Lord towards us. Thanks for sharing your heart through this piece. The Lord bless you. Peace!
C D Swanson 06/17/12
I felt "your heart" in this piece...and it touched me. Thank you. God Bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 06/20/12
This is a powerful piece. I so agree with the points you make. My youngest is graduating high school and I know it's not easy to raise good kids.

I wish you had gone even farther with this and shown me some of the tough decisions she had made. It would have helped me connect with the characters more.

I think you were spot on the topic and did a nice job of covering it while still delivering a great message.