The Official Writing Challenge
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11/02/05
This is definitely well-written, but it confused me a bit. She died, then got sent back in time? Or was it a flash of a daydream, and the accident never happened?

My favorite phrase: "....fighting with her purse for possession of the car keys." So true!
11/02/05
Ooo! How chilling. What a powerful vision she had. When God gives you one, you better take heed! Thanks:)
11/02/05
I had a hard time getting past the cat being named after Bill Clinton. I'm sorry.. I just wondering if it was a "Tom cat"... and that was the reason for the name..and it threw me off of the rest of the story. I did like the line about the purse though! And the way that Jesus was hers alone, and yet managing the universe and all.
11/02/05
I had a hard time getting past the cat being named after Bill Clinton. I'm sorry.. I just wondering if it was a "Tom cat"... and that was the reason for the name..and it threw me off of the rest of the story. I did like the line about the purse though! And the way that Jesus was hers alone, and yet managing the universe and all.
11/03/05
Wow. Super job, I was totally in your grasp on this one. Thanks. The ending was the clincher - When I started to read this I was prepared for a POV lecture, but the ending made this story come together.
11/03/05
I think I got just a little confused about what actually transpired in the second paragraph and the last paragraph?? I went back and read again looking for a clue but didn't find one. A really good story, but I kind of drew a blank. Still curious to know. God bless ya, littlelight
11/04/05
I liked the purse comment too, but my other favorite was: "As He cupped her cheek with a wounded hand, she could feel the scar from when the nail had pierced Him" :) Karen
11/04/05
Wow. This is a winner in my eyes.
You go!
11/05/05
Very interesting story (try to have a new paragraph for each new speaker). Well written.
12/21/08
I love this kind of story and the twist at the end. You could have lessened some of the confusion by using italics for the ending and that way people would know that the Lord had warned you of the accident mere moments before it happened, giving you the chance to pull over and stop the car. What I like most about this story is that she actually heard and immediately responded to the Lords warning.