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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Risk (05/17/12)

TITLE: His precious name
By Raymond Dickerson
05/22/12


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rolling dice, tumbling, tumbling
strike the sidewalk, off and running
dancing numbers soon becoming
someoneís loss or gain. still you

spin the wheel to look for answers,
take a sugar pill for cancer,
ask the nearest necromancer,
where to place the blame. for your

wasted years and all those tears, your
fading dreams that disappeared, your
trust in things that you should fear to
help you find your way. turn to

tarot cards, to shooting stars to
tell you who you really are, your
smoke and mirror prison guards canít
free you from your pain. you canít

read a palm thatís wet with sweat, canít
free a fish caught in a net, canít
take a chance you wonít regret
until you cry the name. cry the

only name that youíve forsaken,
pushed aside by risks youíve taken,
all the while your hearts been breaking,
broken it will stay, until you

look above not inside, no
answers there for you to find, no
truth within the devils lies, no
shelter from the rain. try the

One whoís knocking at your door to
bring you peace and so much more, just
trade your risk for His reward and
call upon His name, His precious name.


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/25/12
This has A lovely rhythm to it The words just roll off my tongue. Nice job.
CD Swanson 05/25/12
Beautiful flow, lovely words, and powerful meaning. Great job. Thank you.

God bless~
Mildred Sheldon05/28/12
I so agree with what you have written. Powerful and it flowed like a river. Thanks for sharing and God bless.
Theresa Santy 05/28/12
The title drew me in, and I was not disappointed. Lovely flow and rhythm. Loved your choice of words.

Well done.
Ellen Carr 05/30/12
I really enjoyed your poem and its message. Just one thought (and one that others may not agree with)- is there a reason for your line breaks? Would it work equally well to do it this way(eg):
...
where to place the blame.

for your wasted years and all those tears,
your fading dreams that disappeared,
your trust in things that you should fear
to help you find your way.

turn to tarot cards, to shooting stars
to tell...

But, well done regardless.
Fiona Stevenson05/30/12
An unusual method of writing, but it does catch the attention. And it carries a strong message. Well done. God bless you.
Lois Farrow05/30/12
Beautifully written, well done.
Theresa Santy 05/31/12
Congratulations!
Ada Nett05/31/12
I am always amazed at the possibilities when I come across a piece that is different. I lie you creative style and the truth it drives home.
~Cathy~
Pam Ford Davis 05/31/12
Congratulations on your winning article! Keep pursuing your dreams...

Wing His Words!
Hiram Claudio05/31/12
Congrats on your 1st place finish ... and for moving up to the Advanced level!
Ellen Carr 05/31/12
Congratulations on your win! Further to my earlier comments re line breaks - the experts, who are far more experienced, well-read and knowledgable than I am like the way you've done it. (And I did too but was just wondering about the 'why'.) So keep doing it that way and keep writing such inspirational poetry.
CD Swanson 05/31/12
Congratulations! God Bless~
Genia Gilbert05/31/12
Congratulations on your EC and your #1 placing in level 2. Great job!