The Official Writing Challenge
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05/17/12
Awwww. I simply adore this poem. How beautiful! It touched my heart. Thank you.

God bless~
05/20/12
Beautiful! That's the only fame I want either. Keep writing!
05/20/12
This is so lovely. I really get how you feel, starting off in a dark and lonely place, searching...but for what? Then God pulls you in.

The only thing I might mention is to be a bit more aware of the rhythm pattern and try to keep the same number of syllables in each stanza. (many lines have 7 but some have 9)

You really touched my heart with your words. I think this is an excellent way to process how so many people feel alone and left out of life but God knows us all.
05/21/12
Greetings -

I applaud your talent. This is a delightful and meaningful read.

Thank you.