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05/03/12
This story left me with a deep sense of what treasures really are. You covered the topic and left a poignant message that's not going to be forgotten by your readers.
Cathy
05/04/12
This was so powerfully executed, and brought forth a myriad of emotions. This is so true of many people's personal lives...money doesn't mean anything.

God and love are what it is all about. This brilliant entry will resonate in the readers minds long after its read.

Thank you. God Bless~
05/04/12
This was so powerfully executed, and brought forth a myriad of emotions. This is so true of many people's personal lives...money doesn't mean anything.

God and love are what it is all about. This brilliant entry will resonate in the readers minds long after it's read.

Thank you. God Bless~
05/05/12
Great work!
This is a great story. I loved the characters and the descriptions. I was pulled in by the first sentence.

In my opinion the ending seemed kind of abrupt. I know part of it was the word count but it may have been stronger if you had ended it with Matt's comments. You did such an excellent job of putting the problem in the forefront that the reader didn't need to know Joseph wept to realize he had learned a lesson. I wondered if it was a play on the Bible verse Jesus Wept because the names were so close.

Other than that one bit every other part was fabulous. You nailed the topic in a great way. The title may have given the ending away a bit but I still think the message is one we all could remember. It's like the old saying walk a mile in someone else's shoes. Great job on this piece.

05/07/12
An excellent picture of dejection and rejection that comes into correction.

There was one 'quiet' which should have been a 'quite', but I feel a nit-picker for pointing it out when you did such a good job.

Masterful.
05/07/12
You did a good job comparing and contrasting the two loves in the homes. Good job.
05/07/12
Good job at showing what true riches are! Thanks!
This is a very powerful story and the title said it all. A very well written piece. Thank you for sharing and God bless.
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