The Official Writing Challenge
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04/28/12
Nicely done...I like how you chronicled each journey with reference to the Word, and ending it with our Savior, the Lord Jesus Christ.

I loved it. Great job.

God Bless~
The meaning behind this piece is crystal clear. It can be scary to take those steps forward but what a comfort to know Jesus is with us.

I did stumble over some lines and had a hard time getting the words out. I don't have a natural ear for the stressed and unstressed syllables so I could be wrong but my gut feeling is the pattern of stressed and unstressed syllables was off just a bit. I also noticed at times you had delightful rhymes and other verses didn't rhyme.

The most important thing is to know you are touching the heart of people all over the world. There are people in dozens of countries who are being uplifted from your beautiful words coupled with the Holy Spirit's nudging. How cool is that? Nice job.