The Official Writing Challenge
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11/01/05
Beautiful work! Your descriptions are vivid--I could smell the wine, see it and feel the pain of your main character.
11/02/05
Very vivid descriptions, although watch the overuse of adjectives. A few grammar glitches, such as commas after introductory words, but all in all a well done essay with a lot of images and feelings.
11/02/05
Your next-to-last paragraph has an interesting scriptural parallel in it which I'll be thinking about for a while. Thank you.
11/02/05
I liked reading through this story. I felt the anger, the bitterness, and understanding, and remorse. Peace and love settled. Maybe it was the wine? God bless ya, littlelight
11/06/05
A very touching article. I, who haven't much of a concentration span...read it to the end; and I shed a few tears: nicely written. I liked it.