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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Holiday (04/05/12)

TITLE: Toni'a Disappointing Holiday Plans
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04/11/12


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Tonia was looking forward to her Easter holiday with Ted, her fiancé. She had known Ted for six months and it would be fun, she thought, being with him in church, attending other functions and meeting some of his friends. She met his parents several weeks ago and they seemed quite taken with her and she with them. Spending time with Ted in his hometown and visiting some of his favorite hang outs, would fun. At least, that is what she hoped for. Living 20 miles from Ted made it somewhat hard getting to know him but they had a lot in common and that made the relationship, so far, smooth and comfortable.

The day before the Easter holiday, which would be spent at his home—and in separate bedrooms at night for several days— was something she was looking forward to, until she received a phone call from Ted the day before the event.

“Hi Tonia. Just wanted to give you a call and make sure that we’re still on for our holiday trip. My parents and I have everything ready and are looking forward to your visit. I will be picking you up tomorrow around nine in the morning and then we will take in some sights around the area. I hope you won’t mind that I have also asked Brenda, an old school chum, to go with us on our trips. She is so nice. We dated in college and she still is a good friend.”

Tonia was a bit stunned with the information but replied, “Ted, I was looking forward to being with you. This information, I have to tell you, is a bit upsetting. I thought you said that it would be just you and me. And besides, we’re almost engaged.”

There was silence on the phone and then, “Well, I didn’t think you would mind. She is, after all, a close friend of mine.”

“Well Ted, I think I am going to have to say no to this. Two is company but three is a crowd and I think I would be the one making it a crowd. Have fun with your friend and I will do something nice here. Take care…”

Before Ted could reply, the conversation was over and so was Tonia’s good feelings for Ted. She wasn’t too surprised at his reply and mention of the other women. Lately, he had been acting strange, looking longingly at other women and always interrupting her when she talked.

The day of the supposed holiday with Ted arrived and Tonia made plans to go with Bill to the theater to watch an action movie. As she got dressed for the event, she gazed out her bedroom window and saw Ted. Ted was standing on the front lawn and holding a sign that said, “Please reconsider. Brenda is not Going!”

After she saw the sign, she yelled down. “Sorry Ted. I have made other plans for today.”
He bowed his head and for awhile just stood there frozen. Later, he left but not without saying, “You are a cruel woman, Tonia! I used to think that you were beautiful but I no longer think that way!”

Those words stung Tonia at first and then she thought, “I’m glad this happened. He is much more shallow and cruel than I thought. Thank you God for showing me the way!”


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CD Swanson 04/13/12
Praise the Lord for showing her the way. Loved the last line of this well written story. Good job with this.
God Bless~
Donna Wilcher 04/15/12
Great message, I pray more young women learn to set "healthy boundaries" like this MC did. Thanks for sharing this!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/15/12
This is a different Easter story for sure. It held my attention throughout. I liked how you showed the subtle bit of Tonia's personality and that maybe her boyfriend needed to grow up, but it seemed she did too. That's a great way of showing a message instead of just telling it.
Mildred Sheldon04/19/12
Thank you for an interesting story. I enjoyed this very much.