The Official Writing Challenge
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What a great story! I was actually left wanting more at the end. What happens to Griffen? This was really well written and captures the essence of the topic. Awesome job!
03/02/12
Good job of keeping the reader hanging, wanting more! Always a sign of a well written article/story.

I enjoyed this and it touched my heart...there are so many kids like Griffin. I am so happy there are always teachers that care enough like the MC to make a difference.

I want to know what happens next...so maybe a book is coming?? Hint Hint!

Nicely told. God Bless~
The first line was such an attention grabber. My heart hurt for little Griffen.

The only thing I might recommend is to do more showing than telling. This is something many writers wrestle with. The sentence Her job was to advocate for these kids is telling. If you could show how she advocates perhaps by calling parents, working one on one with the student, or standing her ground in the committees to make sure the child gets what he needs, it would paint more of a picture for the reader.

I think most teachers are wonderful teachers. It's not always an easy job but it sure can be rewarding. Nice job.
Special Ed. teachers are miracle workers. I have had just two experiences in such a classroom and at the end of each hour I was exhausted. A bit more showing vs telling and it would sing.
Good job.
Congratulations for ranking 6th in level two!