The Official Writing Challenge
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02/16/12
Excellent job! This was an innovative perspective on the topic at hand. Powerfully executed, and a powerful ending. Great last line. Thanks- God Bless~
An interesting take on the topic. Very well written. Thank you for sharing and God bless.
You make some thought-provoking statements in this essay.

Personally, I find it distracting to use he/she. I think it is fine to use the universal he or even switch and in one paragraph use she, the next he. You covered a lot of scriptures with a limited word count which might make it overwhelming for some readers, instead maybe you could focus on just a few and go into greater detail and give life examples to help more people understand you.

I truly like the way you approached the topic. Many have quoted the Hebrews verse but you went deeper and approached it in an inventive way. I can't even begin to tell you how timely your words are to my hurting heart right this second. The Holy Spirit worked in my heart through your obedience. Bless you.